Q For this assignment, you need to look at the graded essay that was returned today. First, open up the essay. Yes, the rubric is available to see and so is the grading criteria, but any corrections/suggestions are written on the actual paper. After the conclusion of your paper, I've written a number. Anyone who emails me their number, I will add 5 points to their essay grade. Second, you'll want to take the opportunity to look at my suggestions and then make any corrections if necessary. Third, you'll need to switch your original essay from the first person narrative (I, me, our, etc) to third person (he, she, they). -The first time you introduce yourself, you'll want to put your full name, first and last. Maybe the original looks like: I am a first semester college student just trying to get by. I intend to... Now it will read: Benjamin Bratt is a first semester college student just trying to get by. He intends to... or Benjamin intends to... Often, throughout the essay, you might refer to yourself by your first name instead of a pronoun. You may 'tweak' the essay so it sounds better as you change the point of view (POV). Submit by 9:00 a.m. on Monday. This 300 - 400 word assignment is worth 50 points. Example: (First person from "The Ransom of Red Chief" by O'Henry) It looked like a good thing: but wait till I tell you. We were down South, in Alabama—Bill Driscoll and myself— when this kidnapping idea struck us. It was, as Bill after ward expressed it, “during a moment of temporary mental apparition”; but we didn’t find that out till later... Bill and me had a joint capital of about six hundred dollars, and we needed just two thousand dollars more to pull off a fraudulent real estate deal in western Illinois with. We talked it over on the front steps of the hotel. Family ties are strong in semi-rural communities, says we; therefore, and for other reasons, a kidnapping project ought to do better there than in the radius of newspapers that send reporters out in plain clothes to stir up talk about such things. We knew that Summit couldn’t get after us with anything stronger than constables and, maybe, some lackadaisical bloodhounds and a diatribe or two in the local paper. So, it looked good. Rewrite: (Third person of "The Ransom of Red Chief" by O'Henry). It looked like a good thing: but wait till Sam Climent and Bill Driscoll tell the story. They were down South, in Alabama when this kidnapping idea struck them. It was, as Bill afterward expressed it, “during a moment of temporary mental apparition”; but they didn’t find that out till later... Bill and Sam had a joint capital of about six hundred dollars, and they needed just two thousand dollars more to pull off a fraudulent real estate deal in western Illinois. They talked it over on the front steps of the hotel. Family ties are strong in semi-rural communities, they said; therefore, and for other reasons, a kidnapping project ought to do better there than in the radius of newspapers that send reporters out in plain clothes to stir up talk about such things. Bill and Sam knew that Summit couldn’t get after them with anything stronger than constables and, maybe, some lackadaisical bloodhounds and a diatribe or two in the local paper. So, it looked good. *BTW, did you notice that I removed the word "you" from the original. Why did I do that? Rubric POV Essay POV Essay Criteria Ratings Pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeFormat Correct MLA format (Thomas Butler example available in Module 1). Double-spacing, Heading, Last name/page number, Indent, Title 12 to >0.0 pts Format Format met MLA guidelines 0 pts No Marks 12 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeParagraph One Student included where he/she is from, a family reference, as well as work and additional information. Student also successfully changed from first to third person. 8 to >4.0 pts Paragraph One 4 to >0.0 pts Two Elements Student is missing two of the following: where he/she is from, a family reference, a work reference, or third person. 0 pts No Marks Paragraph does not fit essay perimeters. 8 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeParagraph Two Students writes about education and career choice as well as the class assessment - both strengths and weakness. Student changed original from first to third person. 13 to >7.0 pts Paragraph Two Good job. This paragraph has education, career choice, assessment strengths and weaknesses, as well as third person PV. 7 to >0.0 pts Partial Marks Student is missing two of the following: education, career choice, assessment strengths and weaknesses, as well as third person PV. 0 pts No Marks 13 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeParagraph Three Student referenced future goal as well as earning. Student also successfully switched from first to third person. 3 to >0.0 pts Full Marks Student has included goal, earnings, and third person. 0 pts No Marks 3 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeMechanics Students use of capitalization, sentence structure, punctuation, clarity, redundancies, as well as correct tense during the change from first to third person. 14 to >0.0 pts Full Marks 0 pts No Marks 14 pts Total Points: 50 PreviousNext