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"Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world”
– Nelson Mandela

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A Turning Point

A Turning Point

Q Need a model? Click here (Links to an external site.) for an example final TIB essay that is around 500 words. _________ Please submit the final draft of your This I Believe essay here. Your final essay should be about 500 words and should include a title. Also, be sure to review the evaluation criteria below before submitting your final draft. Remember that, according to the syllabus, you must complete all three major assignments (TIB essay, Rhetorical Listening essay, and Collaborative Project) in order to pass the course. You'll also be able to return to this assignment later in the semester if you'd like to refine and revise it further as part of the final exam. Rubric This I Believe Rubric This I Believe Rubric Criteria Ratings Pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomePurpose (Development) 25 to >21.0 pts Accomplished The essay clearly identifies a core belief and consistently develops upon it by offering exceptionally convincing and specific supporting details. 21 to >18.0 pts Emerging The essay clearly identifies a core belief and frequently develops upon it by offering convincing and specific supporting details. 18 to >16.0 pts Average The essay introduces a core belief and occasionally develops upon it by offering supporting details. 16 to >13.0 pts Below Average The essay hints at a core belief but rarely develops upon it by offering supporting details. 13 to >0.0 pts Failing The essay does not identify a core belief and does not develop upon it by offering supporting details. 0 pts No Marks 25 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeCoherence (Organization) 25 to >21.0 pts Accomplished The essay’s organization and coherence are consistently logical. 21 to >18.0 pts Emerging The essay’s organization and coherence are often logical. 18 to >16.0 pts Average The essay’s organization and coherence are occasionally logical. 16 to >13.0 pts Below Average The essay’s organization and coherence are rarely logical. 13 to >0.0 pts Failing The essay’s organization and coherence are not logical. 0 pts No Marks 25 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeInsight (Development) 25 to >21.0 pts Accomplished The essay consistently draws insightful observations that are specific and relevant. 21 to >18.0 pts Emerging The essay often draws insightful observations that are specific and relevant. 18 to >16.0 pts Average The essay occasionally draws insightful observations that are specific and relevant. 16 to >13.0 pts Below Average The essay rarely draws insightful observations that are specific and relevant. 13 to >0.0 pts Failing The essay does not draw insightful observations that are specific and relevant. 0 pts No Marks 25 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeConvention (Style and Mechanics) 25 to >21.0 pts Accomplished The essay consistently demonstrates an ability to utilize the conventions appropriate to audience and genre, including spelling, formatting, and mechanical correctness. 21 to >18.0 pts Emerging The essay often demonstrates an ability to utilize the conventions appropriate to audience and genre, including spelling, formatting, and mechanical correctness. 18 to >16.0 pts Average The essay occasionally demonstrates an ability to utilize the conventions appropriate to audience and genre, including spelling, formatting, and mechanical correctness. 16 to >13.0 pts Below Average The essay rarely demonstrates an ability to utilize the conventions appropriate to audience and genre, including spelling, formatting, and mechanical correctness. 13 to >0.0 pts Failing The essay does not demonstrate an ability to utilize the conventions appropriate to audience and genre, including spelling, formatting, and mechanical correctness. 0 pts No Marks 25 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeLO 1: Demonstrate knowledge of individual and collaborative writing processes. threshold: 2.0 pts 2 pts Meets Expectations 1 pts Does Not Meet Expectations 0 pts No Submission -- Total Points: 100 PreviousNext

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A Turning Point I was raised in a family of three, being the last child. I was also the favorite child because of my discipline and exemplary performance at school. I passed my high school and joined the university, being the only child in the family to ever join a university. I guess this brought jealousy within my elder siblings and each of them despised me. I was pampered by my parents and I went to an Adventist high school. All I knew was love and comfort. I did not even realize my siblings’ cold attitude towards me until later on. My sister was especially always angry at me and talking ill about me. I thought I was the problem and I always tried my best to please her but it would only agitate her even more.